Because you have all suffered through my recent bout of introspective posts - and because I'm feeling generous and brave today - and because I got some 20+ new likes on my Facebook page (not quite to 100 yet, but hopefully soon!)
Here's the prologue of my book*:
*Don't hold me to this exact text just quite yet - I'm always tweaking stuff.
Last page: "She couldn't remember now what she'd been dreaming about now..." I would delete the second "now". Otherwise, looks great!
ReplyDeleteYikes, that's embarrassing. Obviously I haven't yet gone through the proofread stage.
ReplyDeleteLove it!! :D One critique, on page six: ...spend all eternity in a river of fire, cursed to burn for all eternity. Maybe change one of those eternities to "forever"? It just sounds really repetitive there.
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